Tree roots left hanging in midair where soil used to hold them close, reaching, straining for the water that is rushing past, unheeding.
Caves, sometimes hidden by the fluctuating depths, calling to you invitingly.
"Come," they whisper. "Explore."
Alligators, snakes, turtles, fish: darting back and forth, playing tag with their teeth.
Birds singing, warming up that happy feeling inside your bones.
Spiders crawling on the water, daring you to move closer.
Dragonflies and horseflies flitting about, landing on your legs, staring at you, questions in their bulging eyes.
The river is teeming with life.
Life… and death; the equal yet opposite reaction.
There used to be a bridge across part of the
river. You can see the remnants of it still. You can also find a
gold Volkswagen on the bed, just downriver; the current has
managed to move it a few yards, but it's obvious from whence it came.
Fed by hundreds of springs spanning the length of it, the
river is cool year round. It's beautiful, this river. Especially my part
of it. MY part of it... as if I
could actually own a piece of such a natural formation. But I do feel as
if it's a part of me, and I a part of it. It... her. The river
feels like more of a feminine being. I'm not sure why... She's a
loving river. She'll coddle you and float you and let you have your way
with her.
But she can also be... unforgiving.
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ReplyDeleteTo start off, I genuinely enjoyed reading your blog. An important thing as a blogger is to be able to have your tone and purpose of your blog to stay constant throughout your post. Your tone, enthusiasm and tentativeness really showed throughout your writing. The mixture of words and emotion throughout your blog post was very moving and also motivating for myself. I love to write about personal experiences but what I lack and am trying to improve is the use of words without using much of words. Just with your opener, “Tree roots left hanging in midair where soil used to hold them close, reaching, straining for the water that is rushing past, unheeding.”
ReplyDeleteFor this second blog post, referring back to your blog helped me in how I wanted to improve my approach to blogging in general. The art of writing is something I am very passionate about, and I can see that it is yours as well through your use of emotion.
However, as a critic on your blog, I would recommend changing the font color or the background color. Having too close of a resemblance may make it difficult for some audience members. Also, over-using ellipses may seem as if you are at a loss for words. Ellipses are supposed to indicate an open ending.
The image you have selected for your audience to visualize what your post was about, made the entire text seem a lot more serene. How small the text was and how simple it looked made the text connect that much more with the simplicity of the image. The photo gave it a “homey” feeling, as if someone had just been there. As a blogger, Sine Nomine has really captured the liveliness of her blog post to her audience.